Mihi

In class we have been making and saying our own Mihi here it is.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xilpwz_MjkrAM_kssUVVVqof9JfDcQer/view?usp=sharing

feed back for writing/hunting club

In class me and Conner have been working on a hunting picture book for the younger kids.
This book is not real it is all made up. This is me and Conner draft copy of our picture book we are still working on the real one. could you please  give me feedback to help us make it even better.
Here it is click in the link.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v7qFHccqjq3gsVqEX3ZVmjuu8YAzf4ixPXjr3g7YbPo/edit?usp=sharing