Monday 27 May 2019

feed back for writing/hunting club

In class me and Conner have been working on a hunting picture book for the younger kids.
This book is not real it is all made up. This is me and Conner draft copy of our picture book we are still working on the real one. could you please  give me feedback to help us make it even better.
Here it is click in the link.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1v7qFHccqjq3gsVqEX3ZVmjuu8YAzf4ixPXjr3g7YbPo/edit?usp=sharing

1 comment:

  1. Hi Harrison, it's Mary from Lake Brunner School.

    I would give you feedback, but I can't because in order to read it I need permission. Maybe for this to work you could post your draft onto your blog for people to see. If I get permission or if you post your draft I'll make sure to give you feedback.

    From, Mary :)

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.